Opening sentence for my story

Hello.

 We are learning to write an intersting first sentence to hook our reader.

 My first sentence  was:
"I was sitting on the couch focuse play on my xbox

This is my improved sentence.

"Pew pew pew pew pew throw a grenade"

give some feedback to improve my writing

Lily and Angel Nijesh algorithm.

Hello readers, welcome back to my blog. Are task was to get in to a group of three. After we got in to a group of three we started to make are algorithm dance.  We had a programmer, a tester and a bot. Angel is The programmer i am , the tester and the bot was lily. A algorithm dance

what dinosaur i think would of survived the best in New Zealand

Hello reader so we have been learning about dinosaur reading page link