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Wednesday, July 29, 2020

Opening sentence for my story

Hello.
 We are learning to write an intersting first sentence to hook our reader.
 My first sentence  was:
"I was sitting on the couch focuse play on my xbox
This is my improved sentence.
"Pew pew pew pew pew throw a grenade"
give some feedback to improve my writing

1 comment:

  1. Hello Nijesh.
    I am not quite sure if you have completed the writing.Can you have a look at your work and see if it needs a bit of fixing?.

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